This is a Tf fanfic I wrote and was wondering if you guys could give me some feed back.
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My life was so simple. Working at the Energon Plant with my best friend, Dion, going places with Dion, and more working, Dion and I did everything together. We’d known each other for years and years.
Dion was great. When I got the promotion to supervisor, he didn’t complain once. He remained the best transporter and organizer the plant had. The Boss really liked him more than he did me. Who could blame him, though? I wasn’t very outspoken or outgoing. I just did my work and kept my mouth shut and Dion was a polar opposite.
Also unlike me, Dion was popular with the Females. Much to my disappointment, he always had a girlfriend. He always made fun of me and my inability to attract a Female. But, hopefully, that would change.
The day I first saw her was all too normal. The morning started out the same. I pounded on Dion’s front door until he woke up, which did take a little longer than usual then we drove to work. I think I saw her at the front gate, but at that moment I was focused on just starting the day. Dion, who knew all of the Females working with and around us, looked back over his shoulder but kept on walking.
Dion and I where stacking Energon cubes when the Boss came in leading a young Female. I had looked up just to move my neck, then looked back down. My head snapped up again. Slowly, I leaned around Dion to look at her. Whoa, she was, wow! I couldn’t find words to describe her. Her pink armor plating gleamed in the light from outside. Her graceful head nodded occasionally as the Boss told her something. She was gripping her arm in her other hand in front of her. And some pretty hands they were. Her body was straight suggesting nerves. Honestly, I couldn’t blame her, the Boss was pretty scary.
Dion noticed I had stopped working and looked at me.
“Umm, Orion?” he asked. “These things aren’t going to stack themselves. What are you looking at?” I grabbed his head and wrenched it around.
“Ah, I see.” He said. We looked at each other.
“I wonder what her name is.” I said softly. She seemed to notice us staring. She glanced our way and blinked. Her optics where the brightest blue I’d ever seen. She shook her head and turned back to the Boss. “Dang.”
“I’d say she was way out of your league it that wasn’t true for me.” Dion said picking more Energon up.
“What?” I asked, shocked. “She’s out of yours, too?”
“Yep.” Dion said putting the Energon on the stack. “I know when I’m out classed.”
“Still,” I said. “I’d like to know what her name is.”
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